I loved her so much, she was my end and my beginning. The way that I used to admire her was simply inexplicable, and I got the impression that she felt the same way about me, that’s how I perceived it anyway. Clearly I was mistaken. From then everything went wrong, and I was left situated on my bed, clueless as to what had just happened, reminicing, registering into my brain, a piece of my heart felt like it was snatched away from me, from what seemed like one of the best things that had ever happened to me, had bitterly turned to something so sinister.

 

Looking back at the great moments we had, the memories were magical, especially when I met her for the first time, she gave me goosebumps at first sight. I had a breathtaking dream about her a night after the heartbreak, thinking she was there with me, but it turned out she was never there, and it was just me.

 

She was never just an ordinary girl, with an ordinary background, she was special, breathtaking, extraordinary, to say the least and now I know I will never find someone like her again, unfortunately. To be honest I don’t even know what I did wrong, or even why we were split apart. She said she “didnt have feelings for me anymore” eventhough about a week ago she was saying how affectionate she was for me, but I just cant get my head around how someone can be so sour, and betray you like you never meant one single thing to them. Well, I should’ve seen it coming anyway, she was acting particularily strange in the last few weeks of ‘us’, as in her making excuses for not going places with me and generally not caring for what I had to say, I obviously didnt pick up the hints until she told me that she would be going to stay with family in another country. Now this really did aggrevate me because not only did it show that she clearly had no respect for me by not telling me she was leaving but also that she didnt even have the decency to give me a heads up in advance.

 

So now knowing that she was leaving, potentially for a few months, maybe even forever, I really didnt have a clue. I really went through a tough time and had so many strong and mixed emotions, anger really was the prime one, but also disbelief that she, ever so quickly had done this to me. And I wont lie, I did still miss her and i still think about her to this day so you can probably imagine i was heartbroken aswell. But I promised myself and I have stuck to this promise all this time that I would go and see the plane take her away, mostly because indefinately, this was the last time I was ever going to see her again. Although she didn’t realise I was coming to see her I thought she would never know, and even if she did I could simply tell her it was supposed to be a suprise.

 

Josh Ali

 

What I think I could improve:

Less commas

Less ‘ands’

Use more descriptive words in the later stages of my writing

Work on a descriptive ending